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제목 help 등록일 2016-03-28
내용 I am surprised at the news that you hope to live to the countryside.
I know that you would like to start again on your later years.
When you talked to me about your childhood in countryside, you were always happy and missed that times.
But it’s not easy to live countryside now.
First of all, old people like you would go to the hospital unthinking healthy problem.
In countryside, the hospital isn’t near your home.
Sometimes you should come to the city to get treatment.
Second, your kindly friends are not with you so you are sometimes lonely.
Although rural life is monotonous, you can tend to do a vegetable garden to have pastime and get along with your friendly neighbors.
Fresh air in the countryside also helps your health.
I often will visit your place to check what you want to do.
담당강사 Hunter1 등록일 2016-03-29
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Very good, Rose! Please review the slightly edited version below :)

I am surprised at the news that you hope to live in the countryside.
I know that you would like to start again in your later years.
When you talked to me about your childhood in the countryside, you were always happy and missed those times,
but it’s not easy to live in the countryside now.
In the countryside, the hospital is far away.
Sometimes you would have to go to the city to get treatment.
Second, your kind friends are not with you, so you are sometimes lonely.
Although rural life is monotonous, you can tend to a vegetable garden to have a pastime and get along with your friendly neighbors.
Fresh air in the countryside also helps your health.
I will often visit your place to check what you want to do.

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