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| 제목 | Hi Teacher Celine | 등록일 | 2016-04-01 |
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| 내용 | Hello, Nice to know you through Mobie English Class. This composition is preparation before start class. This is hakbum Lee and I live in Bundang - Gyung gi province for 16years. There are 4 members - wife and 2 sons and me for my family. I live at apartment and it is center of the large apartment complex. So very silent and has a beatutiful scene because it is surround with big and several kinds of flower tree. Currently, Korea is spring. So scene is getting beautiful with flower and fresh green and weather is being warm. Really nice season is comming. My company is Samsung Electro-Mechanics located in Suwon. I'm working for 3years so far. My job is design the automation machine. In the initial, my job was interesting but now it is boring because I have to do several other works they are not related to design. My best one of important things is family. Recently I have a big concern for my old son because he is adolescent. |
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| 담당강사 | Celine | 등록일 | 2016-04-01 |
| 첨삭 내용 | ***CORRECTIONS:*** Hello, >> It's nice to know you through Mobile English Class.
>> This composition is a preparation before the class start.
>> Good Sentence^^
There are 4 members - wife and 2 sons and me for my family. >> There are 4 members in my family, my wife and 2 sons.
>> I live in an apartment and it is the center of the large apartment complex.
So very silent and has a beatutiful scene because it is surround with big and several kinds of flower tree. >> It's so very silent and has a beautiful scenery because it is surrounded with a big and several kinds of flowers and trees.
>> The current season in South Korea is spring. The scenery is getting beautiful with flower and fresh green also, the weather is getting warm. It's really a nice season.
>> My company is Samsung Electro-Mechanics where is located in Suwon.
I'm working for 3years so far. >> I have been working for 3 years.
My job is design the automation machine. >> My job is to design the automation machine.
In the initial, my job was interesting but now it is boring because I have to do several other works they are not related to design. >> At first, my job is interesting but now it is boring because I have to do the other several works which are not related to design.
>> One of my best important things is family.
Recently I have a big concern for my old son because he is adolescent. >> Recently, I have a big concern with my old son because he is an adolescent.
====================================================================================================== Hello there, thank you for introducing yourself in advance. It was nice knowing about your personal life. Anyway, I'm so excited to talk with you today. Have a great weekend!^^ -T. Celine^^ |
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