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제목 help 등록일 2016-04-14
내용 Eat well, deep well is the key of my health.
But it's not esay to control stress.
Six years ago I had to work till late and worried about promotion too much.
I couldn't sleep deeply after going home back at night.
After a while I often felt dizzy and then I was diagnosed with anemia.
While I was taking a medicine, I got another disease.
I couldn't imagine that such ill although I wasn't healthy.
I felt near death and promotion was not important any more
After several months treatment, I luckily recovered from disease.
In retrospect my disease resulted from stress and non-exercising.
Since that incident, I have learned pilates.
Pilates is not violent exercise but strengthenes muscle and relaxes mind.
People like me who don't like sports can help to maintain health.
담당강사 Hunter1 등록일 2016-04-15
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Great job, Rose. I'm glad you are feeling better these days :)

Eat well, deep(sleep?) well is the key of my health. (not sure what "deep well" is)*
But it's not esay to control stress.
Six years ago I had to work late, and I worried about promotions too much.
I couldn't sleep deeply after going home at night.
After a while I often felt dizzy, and then I was diagnosed with anemia.
While I was taking medicine, I got another disease.
Though I wasn't feeling well, I never imagined that I had such an illness.
I felt near death, and promotions were not important anymore
After several months of treatment, I luckily recovered from the disease.
In retrospect, my disease resulted from stress and lack of exercise.
Since that incident, I have learned pilates.
Pilates is not tough exercise, but it strengthenes muscles and relaxes the mind.
People like me who don't like sports can help to maintain health.

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