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제목 help, please 등록일 2016-04-25
내용 In my opinion, one of the biggiest change in technology is recorder.
When I was teenage, there was a big recorder at home to hear the music, English conversation.
In my twenties, the cassette recorder was produced and it was small enough to carry in my bag but the price was expensive.
In the 2000s, my thirties MP3 is very popular among youngage and it is more slim.
These days, the machines I’ve just mentioned are disappeared.
The cellular phone substitutes many functions.
Throughout this advanced equipment, we can listen the live music and save the important information and we are always available when we need it.
But the remarkable development in technology is not always optimistic.
One point is our life much easier and more convenient.
Other point is that advanced technology’s autiomation deprives of men’s jobs
담당강사 Hunter1 등록일 2016-04-26
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Great job, Rose!

In my opinion, one of the biggest changes in technology is recording.
When I was teenage, there was a big recorder at home to hear the music and English conversation.
In my twenties, the cassette recorder was produced, and it was small enough to carry in my bag, but the price was expensive.
In the 2000s, my thirties, MP3s were very popular among young people. Mp3 players had a slimmer size than other devices.
These days, the machines I’ve just mentioned have disappeared.
The cellular phone substitutes many functions.
Through this advancedequipment, we can listen to live music, save the important information, and it is always available when we need it.
But the remarkable development in technology is not always good.
One point is that our life is much easier and more convenient.
Another point is that advanced technology’s autiomation deprives men of jobs.

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