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제목 Qingdao and Beer 등록일 2016-06-19
내용 During my summer vacation, I am going to Quingdao, China with my girlfriend.

I have known that the city, her hometown, is very famous for beer and holds a beer festival annually.

I heard that city was dominated by Germany in late 19th and early 20th century and many breweries was made at that time.

That's why the city became famous for beer.

Although the reson is not pleasant, I would like to exprience history and present of the city by visiting the breweries and participating in the beer festival in person.
담당강사 Morgan1 등록일 2016-06-20
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Excellent job! I just have two minor corrections for you on the last sentence. the first four sentences are perfect!

 

During my summer vacation, I am going to Quingdao, China with my girlfriend.

I have known that the city, her hometown, is very famous for beer and holds a beer festival annually.

I heard that city was dominated by Germany in late 19th and early 20th century and many breweries was made at that time.

That's why the city became famous for beer.

Although the reson is not pleasant, I would like to exprience the history of the city and present of the the current city by visiting the breweries and participating in the beer festival in person. We don't say "present of the city". In this case articles are needed for "history" and "current".

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