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제목 help, please 등록일 2016-07-07
내용 Korea has a serious social problem about multicultural family policy.
At past time(about 20 years ago), many bachelors in village couldn’t get married with Korean single women.
Because they didn’t want to live in village, so they got married foreign women of underdeveloped countries like Vietnam, Combodia, Philippin and so on.
But most cases, their merriage lives are unhappy.
The bridegrooms are much older than the brides, some are insane and others are disabled.
The brides don’t be provided any information about their spouses and they don’t speak Korean and know Korean culture.
These are very difficult to adjust their lives in Korea.
If they have their children, they don’t teach korean and living ways and these are affected another problems.
The international marriage which the couples don’tknow each other is a seed of unhappiness.
담당강사 Hunter1 등록일 2016-07-08
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Great job, Rose!

Korea has a serious social problem about multicultural family policy.
In the past (about 20 years ago), many bachelors in villages couldn’t get married to single Korean women,
because the women didn’t want to live in a village, so the men married foreign women from underdeveloped countries like Vietnam, Combodia, Philippin and so on.
In most cases, their marriages are unhappy.
The grooms are much older than the brides, some are insane, and others are disabled.
The brides are not provided any information about their spouses, and they don’t speak Korean or know Korean culture.
It is very difficult for them to adjust to life in Korea.
If they have children, they don’t teach them the Korean way of life, and this causes more problems.
International marriage, in which the couples don’t know each other, is a seed of unhappiness.

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