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제목 Opic answer 1 thank you 등록일 2020-12-16
내용 People don't know the value of health until they lose it. I have the same experience. A few years ago, I had a hard time with a neck disk. I worked so much overtime everyday,  I spent too long time in front of my computer at work. Sometimes i worked more than 16 hours a day. And the neck disc got worse and my hands were getting numb. I had to get treatment for a few years. And i started  exercising yoga and jogging. The pain was reduced more and more. Since then, I have steadily tried to manage my neck disc.  I agree that When you lose your health you lose everything
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People don't know the value of health until they lose it. I have the same experience. A few years ago, I had a hard time with a neck disk. I worked so much overtime everyday,  I spent too long time in front of my computer at work. Sometimes i worked more than 16 hours a day. And the neck disc got worse and my hands were getting numb. I had to get treatment for a few years. And i started  exercising yoga and jogging. The pain was reduced more and more. Since then, I have steadily tried to manage my neck disc.  I agree that When you lose your health you lose everything

 

People don't know the value of health until they lose it. I HAD the same experience a few years ago. I was having some problems with a disc in my neck because I was working so much overtime OR I was working overtime every day. (Use one or the other "working so much overtime OR  working overtime everyday - using both is redundant.) I was spending too much time in front of my computer (we already know it was at work because you mentiond working overtime.) Sometimes, I worked more than 16 hours a day. The disc in my neck was getting worse and my hands were getting numb. I had to get physical therapy for a few years. I started doing yoga and jogging and the pain began subsiding/began to subside. Since thn, I have been managing the pain in my neck. I agree that "when you lose your health, you lose everything".

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