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제목 Camping 2 등록일 2021-02-12
내용 When i was young children, my family went to musu valley. Musu is famous of valley, so many people came here. We built a tent near the valley. In summer, We could swim in the valley, and feel cool. So we could blow off the heat. Also, we ate fried pork in the middle of playing in the water. This is best food that i have ever eaten. In dawn we heard that it might be heavy rain, we needed to escape now. So we left the valley urgently. It was unforgettable memory. In the future, i would like to visit musu with my family again.
담당강사 Sarah2 등록일 2021-02-19
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When i was  young, my family went to Musu valley for our summer vacations. Musu is a famous valley, so  many Koreans spent vacations there. We pitched our  tent near the valley. In summers we would swim in the valley river and feel the fresh cool water.. it was an awesome  way to blow off the hot humid summer heat. as we  played, we took time to  eat fried pork in the middle of playing in the water. This was by far ther  best food that i have ever eaten!. one time before dawn we heard the thunder and saw the lightening  so we knew a big rainstorm was coming. we needed to escape right then.  we quickly packed up everything and left the valley with the storm on our heels. It was an  unforgettable memory. In the future, i would love to take my family since I am a father of two beautiful young children ,camping in the Musu valley after COVID is gone.

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