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제목 Request for e -mailing 등록일 2021-05-24
내용 Hi, Lyndsay. How are you? I have some trouble writing an email. Could you please correct the following sentence?
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Dear XXX,
Thank you for accepting most of our requests. Regarding the influenza vaccine, we understood HanaVax’s situation so we have accepted the updates on clauses 3 & 5. Attached please find the partially executed NDA. Please sign it and send it back to me. (or It would be very helpful if you could send it back to me with the sign.)
담당강사 Lyndsay2 등록일 2021-05-25
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Hi, Lyndsay. How are you? I have some trouble writing an email. Could you please correct the following sentence?
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Dear XXX,


Thank you for accepting most of our requests. Regarding the influenza vaccine, we understand HanaVax’s situation, so we have accepted the updates on clauses 3 & 5. Attached, please find the partially executed NDA. Please sign and return it as soon as possible. Your promt response will be greatly appreciated.

Thank you,

YYY

Jae, you used the base word "accept" twice. You may want to replace this with a synonym, like "adhering to" or "confirmed", if it makes sense to do so. If the returned document should be returned promptly, you may want to add "as soon as possible" with the last line "Your promt response will be greatly appreciated." 

I hope this helps.

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