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제목 My son went to the army. 등록일 2021-07-06
내용 So sad!
Korean adult men must serve the army.
Before going into it, they have the health medical check to get confirmed wheather they are able to stay in the army.
So my son went to the army 3 months ago.
I also had been to it long time ago and I had some problems there, such as mental pain, adaptation and groupe life disorder.
My son has the same problems now as what I experienced.
But parents have do nothing to him except that encourage him when call each other.
I believe him to solve this difficulties and adapt the mood for the army.
I only wish time to go quickly untill seeing him again.
담당강사 Celine 등록일 2021-07-06
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**CORRECTIONS**

 

So sad!
Korean adult men must serve the army.
>> So sad! Korean adult men must serve *in the army.

Before going into it, they have the health medical check to get confirmed wheather they are able to stay in the army.
>> Before going into it, they have *a health medical check to get confirmed *whether they are able to stay in the army.

So my son went to the army 3 months ago.
>> Correct sentence.

I also had been to it long time ago and I had some problems there, such as mental pain, adaptation and groupe life disorder.
>> I also had been to it *a long time ago and I had some problems there, such as mental pain, adaptation, and group life disorder.

My son has the same problems now as what I experienced.
>> My son has the same problems now *like what I've experienced.

But parents have do nothing to him except that encourage him when call each other.
>> But as parents have *done nothing to him except to encourage him when we call each other.

I believe him to solve this difficulties and adapt the mood for the army.
>> I believe he can solve these difficulties and adapt to the mood in the army.

I only wish time to go quickly untill seeing him again.
>> I only wish time to go quickly until seeing him again.

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