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제목 I feel tired 등록일 2021-07-20
내용 I feel tired today.
I couldn't get good sleeps for a few last days because of being worried about my son.
like you knew, he isn't adapting himself in the mood for the army.
His voice was heard over from the line seemed to be tired and weak.
I was surprised and encoureged him whenever I called him.
His superior told us that my son began to have medicine for his depressions once a day from a few days ago.
My wife and I hardly eated and slept almost a month.
We hope that he is better as time passes and realizes there is the end of the army.
I wish God gives him courege and desire.
Thank you.
담당강사 Celine 등록일 2021-07-21
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**CORRECTIONS**

 

I feel tired today.
>> Correct Sentence

I couldn't get good sleeps for a few last days because of being worried about my son.
>> I couldn't get good *sleep *these past few days because of being worried about my son.

like you knew, he isn't adapting himself in the mood for the army.
>> As you know, he isn't adapting himself in the mood for the army. [or] He was having difficulty adapting to the environment of the army.

His voice was heard over from the line seemed to be tired and weak.
>> His voice from the other line sounded tired and weak. 

I was surprised and encoureged him whenever I called him.
>> I was surprised and *encouraged him whenever I called him.

His superior told us that my son began to have medicine for his depressions once a day from a few days ago.
>> His superior told us that my son began to have medicine for his depression once a day from a few days ago.

My wife and I hardly eated and slept almost a month.
>> My wife and I hardly *ate and slept *for almost a month.

We hope that he is better as time passes and realizes there is the end of the army.
>> We are hoping that he will get better and realize as time pass by there is an end of the army. 

I wish God gives him courege and desire.
>> I wish God gives him *courage and desire.

Thank you.

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