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제목 Describe an experience in detail and what you learned from experience to achieve a common goal 등록일 2022-02-27
내용 Facing various quality issues, we learn the importance of collaboration not to be solved individually to be connected mutually.
Numerous defects used to occur in the sub-system during product developemnt.
However, on a system level, the fault rarely causes failures in less than 10% of cases.
The various detections and simple remitigation measures in the low level of mechanic/hardware/software will ensure the safety of customer.
Key factor to solve problems is not the complexity of the technologies, but correlation of the parts.
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Facing various quality issues, we learn the importance of collaboration not to be solved individually to be connected mutually.
Numerous defects used to occur in the sub-system during product developemnt.
However, on a system level, the fault rarely causes failures in less than 10% of cases.
The various detections and simple remitigation measures in the low level of mechanic/hardware/software will ensure the safety of customer.
Key factor to solve problems is not the complexity of the technologies, but correlation of the parts.

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When facing various quality issues, we learn the importance of collaboration. These situations should not be solved individually but rather mutually.
Numerous defects used to occur in the sub-system during product development.
However, from our collaboration we learned that faults within the system rarely cause failures for our customers, in less than 10% of cases.
Various detections and simple remitigation measures were made in mechanic/hardware/software  levels that will ensure the safety of the customer.
We have concluded that the key factor to solving problems is not the complexity of the technologies but the correlation of the parts.

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