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제목 1(2) 등록일 2022-03-07
내용 - It will make us more comfortable, but the security issues should be treated very carefully.

- Yes, I tend to think so. Not only smart speakers but also personal smart phones of computers are could be dangerous.
- These days, it seems that more and more smart devices listen to my personal conversations and display customized advertisements.

- Companies should not only make and sell their products, but also strengthen maintenance service such as periodic security program updates.
담당강사 Lasenda1USA 등록일 2022-03-09
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- It Smart speakers will make us more comfortable, but the security issues should be treated very carefully.

- Yes, I tend to think so. Not only smart speakers, but also, personal smart phones of and computers are could   can be dangerous.
- These days, it seems that more and more smart devices listen to my personal conversations and display customized advertisements.

- Companies should not only make and sell their products, but also strengthen maintenance service, such as periodic security program updates.

 

Jine, 

Great job!

~Teacher La Senda

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