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제목 The effects of peer pressure. (1) 등록일 2022-04-07
내용 We are affected by people because man is a social animal.
The effects of peer pressure is very high and individual opinions cannot be freely expressed in Korea.
Expressing my opinion have to endure so many things.
First, the power of boomers opinion is higher than younger, who feel timid. Boomers always want to be respect to young people.
Second, if you resist boomer’s opinion, they always say "How you dare!"
Finally, they always say "You will pay for this", but nothing gonna happen.
Individual opinions should be respected; however, Boomers use the peer pressure to be respected.
TBC next week
담당강사 Lisa1 등록일 2022-04-08
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We are affected by people because man is a social animal.
The effects of peer pressure is very widespread and individual opinions cannot be freely expressed in Korea.
Expressing my opinion have to endure so many things. (I'm not sure what you mean here.)
Older people's opinions have more power than younger people's. Older people always want younger people to respect them.
If you disagree with an older person's opinion, they always say, "How dare you!"
They always say, "You will pay for this," but nothing happens.
Individual opinions should be respected; however, older people use peer pressure to be respected.
(I am not sure this is peer pressure, exactly. It seems more like generational difference. Also, the term "boomer" technically refers to a specific generation, the baby boomers. Even though colloquially, people can use it to mean "old people," it might be better to be specific in your wording.)

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