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제목 low-income versus high-income (1) 등록일 2022-05-02
내용 Dear Teacher Lisa, as per your advice, The topic has been changed. Please review my writing. Thank you. :)

Since capitalism began, it has been controversial topic as to low-income versus high-income and which topic might have been closed about the gap between the rich and the poor. the root cause is complex and various. I mean there are no right answer.
As I mentioned in my previous writing, low-income has a lot of negative effects on the individual.
In my experience, In spite of low-income, it will have a positive effect, and it help low-income class to get positive mental attitude early.
담당강사 Lisa1 등록일 2022-05-03
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Dear Teacher Lisa, as per your advice, The topic has been changed. Please review my writing. Thank you. :)

Since capitalism began, the topic of the economic gap between the richest and poorest members of society has been a controversial one. The root causes are complex and various.
As I mentioned in my previous writing, a low income has a lot of negative effects on the individual.
In my experience, In spite of low-income, it will have a positive effect, and it help low-income class to get positive mental attitude early. (This is not phrased very clearly.)

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