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제목	Essey	등록일	2022-09-05
내용	What is the best way to remove the war Recently, I have been reading books about Japaness history. The main character's name is 'Dokugawa Ieyas'. He had lived in war time. So many countries in the Japan, they alway fought each others. He tried to stop the war. Eventually, he conquered every states and made peace. But keeping on peace is harder than making peace. Because younger people didn't know what is the war. War could kill all your family, but young people have eager to success and belive war could make them be a rich or hero. If world gives everybody equal chance, there is no war?
담당강사	rosey	등록일	2022-09-06
첨삭 내용	Essay What is the best way to remove the war? Recently, I have been reading books about Japanese history. The main character's name is Tokugawa Ieyasu He had lived in wartime. So many countries in Japan always fought for each other. He tried to stop the war. Eventually, he conquered every state and made peace. But keeping the peace is harder than making peace. Because younger people didn't know what war is. War could kill all your family, but young people have eager to succeed and believe the war could make them rich or heroes. If the world gives everybody equal chance, is there no war?