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제목 A diary on Tuesday 등록일 2023-05-04
내용 My team had small gathering with CEO. There are four members for team which includes the newcomer.
He asked us to what we want to have for a dinner, so we made up our mind to have seafood spicy stew and order it there.
While we was eating it, he added to other menu for us and we drunk soju with a lot of main dishes
Nicely, It was so much fun. We talked various topics such as economy, real estate, life, and vacation.
But I was a bit tipsy. It made me toss and turn last night.
담당강사 Neiz 등록일 2023-05-04
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My team had a small gathering with the CEO. There are four members for in our team which includes , including the newcomer. He asked us to what we wanted to have for a dinner, so we made up our minds and decided to have seafood spicy spicy seafood stew and order it there. While we was were eating it, he added to other another menu for us, and we drunk drank soju with a lot of main dishes. Nicely, it was so much fun. We talked about various topics such as economy, real estate, life, and vacation. But I was a bit tipsy. It made me toss and turn last night.

 

REVISED:

My team had a small gathering with the CEO. There are four members in our team, including the newcomer. He asked us what we wanted to have for dinner, so we made up our minds, and decided to have spicy seafood stew, and order it there. While we were eating, he added another menu for us, and we drank soju with a lot of main dishes. Nicely, it was so much fun. We talked about various topics such as economy, real estate, life, and vacation. But I was a bit tipsy. It made me toss and turn last night.

 

Hi Tony,

You've been really active making a composition which is good because you're able to practice your English skills every time. Simple expressions were used, yet they made the sentences vivid and few lapses were only changed and corrected. And to emphasize, I just added "and decided to" in one of your sentences to make more appropriate statement as you've mentioned that "you made up your mind". Just look up for the changes made, and the corrections so that you won't make the same mistakes and you'd be able to improve more. As always, thanks for this!

 

 

Teacher Neiz

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