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제목 Making sentences using the expressions I learned previous class. 등록일 2023-05-10
내용 The newcomer has joined our them last month. It reminded me that I joined the company for the first time.
Then, I had a mixed feelings. I just felt both pleasant and not pleasant like happy, bright future, worry, and tension about the job at the same time. But I had confidence in myself because I am very diligent, talented , Promising about sales part.
I know if someone hear what I said earlier, they would say that It's pretty surreal story and It is easier than done.
But no doubt, I can make it well
담당강사 Neiz 등록일 2023-05-11
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The newcomer has joined our them team last month. It reminded me that of when I joined the company for the first time.
Then, I had a mixed feelings. I just felt both pleasant and not pleasant unpleasant at the same time like happy, a bright future, worry, and tension about the job. But I had confidence in myself because I am very diligent, talented, and promising about in sales part. I know if someone hears what I said earlier, they would say that it's a pretty surreal story and it is easier said than done. But no doubt, I can make it well.

 

REVISED:

The newcomer has joined our team last month. It reminded me of when I joined the company for the first time.
Then, I had mixed feelings. I just felt both pleasant and unpleasant at the same time like happy, a bright future, worry, and tension about the job. But I had confidence in myself because I am very diligent, talented, and promising in sales part. I know if someone hears what I said earlier, they would say that it's a pretty surreal story and it is easier said than done. But no doubt, I can make it well.

 

Hi Tony, 

Thanks for this as you wrote a relevant story and expressions as you used appropriate words and expressions here. Please take note of the following corrections to avoid the same mistakes. In a nutshell, all I can say is that you have a  determination and courage to think outside the box and extend your learnings. 

 

Teacher Neiz

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