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제목 Mssing tourist submersible 등록일 2023-06-23
내용 The tourist submersible which is founded to see Titanic wreckage is missed with five onboard.
When I read about that news, a few things comes to mind.
People like a expedition especially western more. It is always surprising to advanture something no one had ever done.
They take a risk even though they could lose their life.
And I hope that people don't make children to take a risk under unverified exipediton or adventure.
It is not too late they take a risk under extreme condition after adult
Lastly, I hope that the cause of this accident going to be reveal for people.
담당강사 Vanessa1 등록일 2023-06-26
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The tourist submersible which is founded to see Titanic wreckage is missed with five onboard.
When I read about that news, a few things comes to mind.
People like a expedition especially western more. It is always surprising to advanture something no one had ever done.
They take a risk even though they could lose their life.
And I hope that people don't make children to take a risk under unverified exipediton or adventure.
It is not too late they take a risk under extreme condition after adult
Lastly, I hope that the cause of this accident going to be reveal for people.

 

With five people on board, the tourist submersible that was built for viewing the Titanic wreckage went missing. I had some thoughts after reading that news. Expeditions are popular, especially those from the West. To do something no one has ever done before is always astonishing. Despite the possibility that they could perish, they took a chance. And I sincerely hope that no one forces kids to take a chance on an unknown adventure or exposure. If they do, it's not too late; they may still try it as adults. Finally, I wish that the public will learn what caused this disaster.

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