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| 제목 | My Kid's Birth Registration | 등록일 | 2023-08-09 |
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| 내용 | I went to goverment office to announce my kid's birth to the world. And I filled out a lot of paper work for birth registration. Because of mobile and laptop, I hardly wirte somthing with hands. Long time no writing with hands. So I felt it was very hard to write down letters with hands. | ||
| 담당강사 | Jace1usa | 등록일 | 2023-08-09 |
| 첨삭 내용 | I went to goverment office to announce my kid's birth to the world. And I filled out a lot of paper work for birth registration. Because of mobile and laptop, I hardly wirte somthing with hands. Long time no writing with hands. So I felt it was very hard to write down letters with hands. Hi, Kim Huiju! There are a few errors and areas for improvement in the statement: 1. "Goverment" should be spelled as "Government." 2. The phrase "to announce my kid's birth to the world" could be rephrased as "to register my child's birth." 3. "Paper work" should be written as "paperwork" (one word). 4. "Birth registration" should be plural as it refers to multiple forms, so it should be "birth registrations." 5. The sentence "Because of mobile and laptop" could be revised to provide a clearer explanation. 6. "Hardly wirte somthing with hands" should be written as "hardly write something by hand." 7. The sentence "Long time no writing with hands" should be rephrased as "It has been a long time since I've written by hand." 8. "Write down letters with hands" could be rephrased as "write letters by hand." Revised statement: "I went to the government office to register my child's birth. I had to fill out a lot of paperwork for the birth registrations. As I usually rely on mobile and laptop for writing, it had been a while since I last wrote anything by hand. Therefore, it was challenging for me to write the letters with my hands." | ||