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제목 | National Sports teams | 등록일 | 2023-08-21 |
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내용 | First, sports players don't have to worry about their finances. So they concentrate on developing their sports talents and skills. Second, they would be more proud of representing and supported national level. People also more interested in their representation and cohesion Third, if private companies fund it, they focus on popular sports such as football, swimming and Judo. So unpopular sports are not spotlited and diversity of sports developmnets would be reduced. |
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담당강사 | Vanessa1 | 등록일 | 2023-08-22 |
첨삭 내용 | First, sports players don't have to worry about their finances. So they concentrate on developing their sports talents and skills.
First, sports players don't have to worry about their finances. They should focus on honing their sporting abilities and talents. Second, they would be more proud to represent and be supported at the national level. Third, if private corporations sponsor it, they can focus on popular sports like football, swimming, and judo.
So unpopular sports are not spotlited and diversity of sports developmnets would be reduced. - ( I don't understand the whole point here ) |