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| 제목 | 0708 New York City Architecture | 등록일 | 2024-07-08 |
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| 내용 | When we think of New York City, the building that quickly come to mind is the city skyscraper and this skyscraper of famous buildings show people the history of each period when buildings has been made up. Each building represent Art Deco and New Gothic and International periods and the elegant brown townhouse that make up a large part of the city's residential area, are also highly recognizable. | ||
| 담당강사 | Jace2usa | 등록일 | 2024-07-09 |
| 첨삭 내용 | When we think of New York City, the building that quickly come to mind is the city skyscraper and this skyscraper of famous buildings show people the history of each period when buildings has been made up. Each building represent Art Deco and New Gothic and International periods and the elegant brown townhouse that make up a large part of the city's residential area, are also highly recognizable. The sentence you provided has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Here's a corrected version with some helpful insights: When we think of New York City, the buildings that quickly come to mind are the city skyscrapers. These skyscrapers, along with other famous buildings, showcase the history of each period in which they were constructed. Each building represents Art Deco, New Gothic, and International architectural styles. The elegant brownstone townhouses that make up a large part of the city's residential areas are also highly recognizable. **Insights:** 1. **Subject-Verb Agreement:** "The buildings that quickly come to mind **are**..." - Ensure subject-verb agreement: "buildings" is plural, so "are" (plural verb) is correct here. 2. **Clarity and Structure:** Separate ideas clearly to improve readability and comprehension. - Break down the sentence into smaller, clearer segments to enhance understanding. 3. **Grammar and Punctuation:** Proper use of commas and periods helps in structuring the sentence correctly. - Use commas to separate ideas within a sentence and periods to end sentences appropriately. 4. **Phrasing and Word Choice:** Choose words that accurately convey your intended meaning. - Use precise language to describe architectural styles ("Art Deco," "New Gothic," "International"). 5. **Consistency and Cohesion:** Ensure coherence by linking related ideas together. - Connect ideas logically to maintain flow and coherence throughout the sentence. | ||