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| 제목 | Non GMO and Organic Food | 등록일 | 2024-07-13 |
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| 내용 | Those who focus on healthy life, could pay attention to the healthy food of Organic and Non GMO. The first, Organic food is the one that is raised and made without any artificial material and the second is the organism with Non Genetically Material. These materials could be controlled by Non GMO project, which is non profit organization, focusing on the prevention of GMO food. | ||
| 담당강사 | Jace2usa | 등록일 | 2024-07-16 |
| 첨삭 내용 | Those who focus on healthy life, could pay attention to the healthy food of Organic and Non GMO. The first, Organic food is the one that is raised and made without any artificial material and the second is the organism with Non Genetically Material. These materials could be controlled by Non GMO project, which is non profit organization, focusing on the prevention of GMO food. Here is a corrected version along with insights into the changes: **Corrected Sentence:** Those who focus on a healthy lifestyle might pay attention to organic and non-GMO foods. Organic foods are produced without any artificial additives, while non-GMO foods come from organisms that have not been genetically modified. The Non-GMO Project, a non-profit organization, focuses on preventing the use of genetically modified organisms (GMOs) in food. **Insights:** 1. **Grammar and Structure:** - Changed "healthy life" to "a healthy lifestyle" for clarity and natural phrasing. - "Could pay attention to the healthy food of Organic and Non GMO" was revised to "might pay attention to organic and non-GMO foods" for smoother readability and to correctly use "organic" and "non-GMO" as adjectives. - Removed "The first," and "the second is" to improve flow and readability. 2. **Clarity and Precision:** - Clarified "Organic food is the one that is raised and made without any artificial material" to "Organic foods are produced without any artificial additives" to simplify and make the definition more accurate. - Changed "the organism with Non Genetically Material" to "non-GMO foods come from organisms that have not been genetically modified" for clearer and accurate definition. 3. **Factual Accuracy:** - Corrected "These materials could be controlled by Non GMO project" to "The Non-GMO Project, a non-profit organization, focuses on preventing the use of genetically modified organisms (GMOs) in food" to accurately describe the role of the Non-GMO Project. 4. **Punctuation and Capitalization:** - Corrected punctuation and capitalization throughout, such as "Non GMO" to "non-GMO" and "Non Genetically Material" to "genetically modified" for consistency and correctness. - Added commas for clarity and to separate clauses correctly. These changes ensure the sentence is grammatically correct, clear, and factually accurate. | ||