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| 제목 | 0731 Soft Drink | 등록일 | 2024-07-31 |
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| 내용 | Since the late 1870s, soft drink has been popularized and ma ny companies have produced various brands, flavors and options that suit everyone's tastes. But an increasing number of studies have shown that drinking sodas is potentially dangerous to our bodies with serious diseases such as obesities, diabetes and loss of bone density. So, in 2010, U.S President, Obama signed the law an act to prohibit the soda drink from young people. Chinese tea, Pu'er Tea is one of my favorite drinks to make me feel confortable night time, instead of soft drink. |
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| 담당강사 | Jace2usa | 등록일 | 2024-07-31 |
| 첨삭 내용 | Since the late 1870s, soft drink has been popularized and ma ny companies have produced various brands, flavors and options that suit everyone's tastes. But an increasing number of studies have shown that drinking sodas is potentially dangerous to our bodies with serious diseases such as obesities, diabetes and loss of bone density. So, in 2010, U.S President, Obama signed the law an act to prohibit the soda drink from young people. Chinese tea, Pu'er Tea is one of my favorite drinks to make me feel confortable night time, instead of soft drink. The sentence has several errors and areas that can be improved for clarity and correctness. Here are the insights and corrections: ### Original Sentence: > Since the late 1870s, soft drink has been popularized and many companies have produced various brands, flavors and options that suit everyone's tastes. But an increasing number of studies have shown that drinking sodas is potentially dangerous to our bodies with serious diseases such as obesities, diabetes and loss of bone density. So, in 2010, U.S President, Obama signed the law an act to prohibit the soda drink from young people. ### Issues and Corrections: 1. **Singular vs. Plural:** - "soft drink" should be "soft drinks" to match the context of "various brands, flavors and options." - "obesities" should be "obesity" as obesity is an uncountable noun. 2. **Verb Tense Consistency:** - "has been popularized" is correct, but "have produced" should be revised for consistency. - "is potentially dangerous" should match with the past context by changing it to "are potentially dangerous." 3. **Article Usage:** - "the law an act" should be "a law" or "an act." - "the soda drink" is awkward; "soda drinks" or "sodas" is better. 4. **Commas and Punctuation:** - "U.S President, Obama" should be "U.S. President Obama" without the comma. - Ensure consistent and appropriate use of commas throughout. ### Corrected Sentence: Since the late 1870s, soft drinks have been popularized, and many companies have produced various brands, flavors, and options that suit everyone's tastes. However, an increasing number of studies have shown that drinking sodas is potentially dangerous to our bodies, causing serious diseases such as obesity, diabetes, and loss of bone density. Therefore, in 2010, U.S. President Obama signed a law to prohibit soda drinks for young people. ### Insights: 1. **Subject-Verb Agreement:** Ensure subjects and verbs agree in number (singular/plural). 2. **Consistency in Tense:** Maintain consistent verb tenses within the same context. 3. **Correct Article Use:** Use appropriate articles ("a," "an," "the") for clarity and correctness. 4. **Clarity and Conciseness:** Use clear and concise language to avoid ambiguity. 5. **Proper Noun Usage:** Proper nouns, such as titles and names, should be correctly formatted without unnecessary commas. 6. **Medical and Scientific Terms:** Use singular forms for medical conditions that are generally uncountable nouns. Also, thank you so much for the Pu'er Tea! It has great benefits, and I can't wait to try it. |
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