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| 제목 | Olympic | 등록일 | 2024-08-02 |
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| 내용 | Each olympic of summer and winter comes every four year and it bring great opportunities for athletes and nations that holds olympic. Those who join into Olympic as athletes represent their countries and might have trained for their whole lives. Winning gold medal in olympic means he is the best of the best in the world and get the greatest honor as athletes. Nations that hold the Olympic games also have opportunities to boost the economy and secure jobs for young people. | ||
| 담당강사 | Jace2usa | 등록일 | 2024-08-05 |
| 첨삭 내용 | Each olympic of summer and winter comes every four year and it bring great opportunities for athletes and nations that holds olympic. Those who join into Olympic as athletes represent their countries and might have trained for their whole lives. Winning gold medal in olympic means he is the best of the best in the world and get the greatest honor as athletes. Nations that hold the Olympic games also have opportunities to boost the economy and secure jobs for young people. The sentence has several grammatical and stylistic issues. Here’s a revised version with explanations for the changes: **Revised Sentence:** "Each Olympic Games, whether summer or winter, occurs every four years and brings great opportunities for athletes and the nations that host the Games. Athletes who participate in the Olympics represent their countries and may have trained for their entire lives. Winning a gold medal in the Olympics means being recognized as the best in the world and receiving the highest honor for an athlete. Nations that host the Olympic Games also have the opportunity to boost their economy and create jobs for young people." **Explanations:** 1. **"Each Olympic Games"**: - Use "Olympic Games" rather than "Olympic" because the Games is the correct term for the event. 2. **"Whether summer or winter"**: - Clarify that you are referring to both the Summer and Winter Olympics. 3. **"Occurs every four years"**: - Use "occurs" instead of "comes" for better clarity and accuracy. 4. **"Brings great opportunities"**: - Use "brings" instead of "it bring" to match the subject "Each Olympic Games" which is singular. 5. **"The nations that host the Games"**: - Use "host" instead of "holds" and "the Games" to specify which event you are referring to. 6. **"Athletes who participate in the Olympics"**: - "Participate" is more appropriate than "join into." 7. **"May have trained for their entire lives"**: - "May" is used to express possibility, and "entire" is more precise than "whole." 8. **"Winning a gold medal in the Olympics means being recognized"**: - "A gold medal" is specific, and "being recognized" provides clarity about the meaning. 9. **"Receiving the highest honor for an athlete"**: - "Receiving" and "the highest honor" are clearer than "get the greatest honor as athletes." 10. **"Host the Olympic Games"**: - Use "host" rather than "hold" to accurately describe the role of the nations. 11. **"Create jobs for young people"**: - "Create" is more precise than "secure" in this context, and "young people" is clearer than "jobs for young people." These changes improve clarity, accuracy, and grammatical correctness in the sentence. | ||